100 Word Challenge- Week 6

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Summer 1985, a eight year old boy was found in a local pond at Country Court Park. The young child’s name has reported to be Jason Mile. Reportly, Jason had stumbled into the pond. As his friends tried their best to get him out, they were unsuccessful. Before they knew it, Jason had sunken down into the water which caused him to drown himself. Once police arrived, Jason’s friends were in shock and wary that they just witnessed their friend pass away in front of their eyes. Jason’s parents were also in shock and warying about their young little boy’s death.

3 thoughts on “100 Word Challenge- Week 6

  1. Such a sad, sad tale.

    Good job, overall. There are very few minor errors that could be caught with editing.

  2. Hi Jillian!

    A really great piece of reporter style writing. Is this field something that you’re interested in? I can relate to it having watched the news and documentaries on these type of events. The way you put across the story was professional, but not at all boring, which is really important. Your use of all of the different parties involved is also really relevant – in real cases people would be sought after to give their feelings etc. The way you convey the shock and mourning is really mature. Keep up the good work!

  3. This is written really well and the sentences flow to create a good piece of writing. The description is good and creates imagery.

    Greatjob.

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